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justicemadeblind ([personal profile] justicemadeblind) wrote in [personal profile] legalcy 2022-06-30 02:46 pm (UTC)

voice; $notanenforcer

Minimus? It's Prowl. I've finished going over the core text of the rulebook you gave me, and I've added my own comments.

[ Ping! There's a big ol' scan of the thing uploaded, Prowl's little red pen notes included. ]

While I'll let you read most of the suggestions yourself, I just wanted to personally point out that I believe the wording needs to be rewritten as vaguer and more blanketing in some areas, to protect the widest array of mechs. Overly specific wording used to end up in a lot of loopholes, when I was in the force.

Other than that and a few other notes I've made, it's a solid manual. I think as soon as you've discussed it with your team, I can move on to writing a more accessible version.

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